hi its sasha again, its the same essay as before it just has to be edited. 

What do you mean by “intensity of the prevailing situation”? Can you get more specific there?

Probably no need to define poetry in your opening sentences since the focus of your essay is not so much in defining poetry but in discussing how certian poems either reflect or refute the “old position.”

Introduce, contextualize and define the “old position.” This is not a universal term but rather one that Robert Bly invented to frame his anthology. 

TS#1 Which aspects relate and which aspects differ? Your topic senence should be a clear mini argument and contain the main idea of your paragraph. 

Replcae “the author” with the author’s last name and pay attention to diversifying your sentence structures if it’s sounding repetative 

Last sentence of body paragraph four should be a transitional sentence and thus super clear (avoiding words like “it” or “thing”)